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Old 10-29-2020, 10:14 AM   #2
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Thought this could have been more thought out. Your flow would be helped out by some multi syllable rhymes imo. Just the bars didn’t feel like they were connecting from one to the other. I mean it rhymes for the most part but isn’t strong as it could be. The first bar didn’t rhyme at all either but the subject matter you dealt with was relatable so kudos for that, keep working
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