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Old 10-16-2020, 10:53 PM   #13
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I had to read both of them a couple times to get myself back into the mindset needed to vote on this fairly considering i've been away for awhile and needed to readjust back into topicals lol
Honestly I enjoyed Johnny's more for the simplistic approach; it made it easier to grasp the flow and imagery, but i feel like it needed that simplicity to make the story pop out to me since it seemed to lack depth. I really liked the take on the topic and the ending brought it full circle with the Pinocchio foreshadow but it just didnt have enough substance to make such a well known story feel like it finally had a back story.
Adverse I feel the opposite about. It took a couple reads to really catch the flow intended but i think that was more on my interest in the story and the imagery that i kinda ignored the rhyme scheme just so i could enjoy the story the first read through. I was genuinely interested to get to the reveal line and wasnt disappointed.
I got adverse winning just for the more intriguing read with enough help with the flow and imagery to edge out Johhny's crisp rhyme scheme. Good battle ya'll and sorry for a shortish vote.
Vote: Adverse
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