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Old 06-18-2013, 11:15 PM   #7
Vulgar
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This was an alright vent piece. You seemed to commit to a manageable rhyme scheme and didn't do anything ambitious with it. Would've liked to see more aggression and a clearer description of personal circumstances: really brings the reader into your world.

Im so Tired of living this way and how my body is inhibiting chains
In continuous pain and unable to see significant gains.
^This was solid.

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