Netcees - View Single Post - WEEK 2: Orc 0-0 VS Jaysonfresh 0-0 ORC WINS

Universe · 10-13-2020, 02:23 PM

Orc:

All the sneak disses. U really justa coward to me
We boutta see a Hideous Body, it’ll make Barcotic feel empowered & free

- haha, good start.

Brooo if u say Hi to a bitch?! She pretends to phone a friend
You ain’t seeing noo Second Wave.. it got Scientists starting to hope again

- Clever and current, which is a bonus.

Remember u asked for tips?! Your flow is the worst
I told you “always be Punctual”. I didn’t say put Full Stops all over ya verse

- Good poke.

I came up from nothing. My love life is BIG
Dogg. We only say YOU ‘Got it out the Mud’ cuz ya girl looks like a Pig

- Meh.

&&They sayn J’s tricky but he ain’t ever honed his pen
Trustttt. 1hit will turn this Stumbling Block to a “Never Walks Home Again”

- Loved this.

Orc is 1% body fat; I just happen to type as well
If u’re coming thru Well-Conditioned. That Argan Oil got u feeling fly as hell

- Not a new concept but it was executed well enough.

Consistency fails you & you’ll never reach the very top
You got a style like Aero. Best believe there’s something Ass in every drop

- lol.

&&&Ya wife been on the squa for the whooole season
Shaming ya badly; Avery Bradley. U gave that bitch a Ring for no reason

- Well written, but an iffy closer.

JaysonFresh:

Yo.
Its Mr. Fresh..

- Oh boy...

vs the guy who took Butlers style n gave it serious flaws
Ima clear this imposta out quicka than his bank account when Prince of Nigeria calls

- Dumb, but made me chuckle.

nscrawny ass. run when my gun triggers
pushin u ova's like drug mules in airport stalls .. force u out with one finger

- Kind of cool.

referee stoppage first round nigga no opening dong
get popped before the count like gender reveal party gone wrong.

- haha... :)

Who da’ real pussy? when my tool’s drawn..
I’ll put a chink in ya armor to expose the bitch inside like gottam Mulan.

- Chink in ya armor is played af to me... but this was actually done well.

shiiit one look atcha no wonder fiancee aint sober too
Yalls wedding registry included a paper bag to put over u

- Funny. But very... general.

plus she call me ova like yoo Jay wanna fuck quick?
I give her 'privates the kinda drill session' that make her pussy army crawl thru mud pits.

- Again, clever... but this is some stored in your notebook for a rainy day shit.

Ur dunzo. one punch, ya mouth n chest wall connect
jaw locked up soooo long doggg its plottin prison escape thru crawl vents

- Loved this. More of this please.

check it I pick up chicks that belong on magazine covers
ya u kick game too. Mad when ya bf stood u up at dave & busters.

- Just seems very elementary to me. Schoolyard diss.

This was a good battle... Both are good writer's and displayed their wit. But I think J Fresh's verse was just too general for my liking. His punchlines could've applied to anyone; And although everybody has these types of lines, I felt Orc mixed and matched his a little better. His verse seem tailored to the opponent/league/current events, etc... J's seemed... thrown at the wall and see what sticks... If that makes sense. Very entertaining though.

Vote: Orc

10-13-2020, 02:23 PM	#6
Universe Everything's Connected Join Date: Nov 2017 Location: Niagara Falls, Canada Posts: 1,001 Battle Record: 19-8 Champed - Guerrilla Writing League(2x) - GWL Picture challenge(2x) - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 10178706	Orc: All the sneak disses. U really justa coward to me We boutta see a Hideous Body, it’ll make Barcotic feel empowered & free - haha, good start. Brooo if u say Hi to a bitch?! She pretends to phone a friend You ain’t seeing noo Second Wave.. it got Scientists starting to hope again - Clever and current, which is a bonus. Remember u asked for tips?! Your flow is the worst I told you “always be Punctual”. I didn’t say put Full Stops all over ya verse - Good poke. I came up from nothing. My love life is BIG Dogg. We only say YOU ‘Got it out the Mud’ cuz ya girl looks like a Pig - Meh. &&They sayn J’s tricky but he ain’t ever honed his pen Trustttt. 1hit will turn this Stumbling Block to a “Never Walks Home Again” - Loved this. Orc is 1% body fat; I just happen to type as well If u’re coming thru Well-Conditioned. That Argan Oil got u feeling fly as hell - Not a new concept but it was executed well enough. Consistency fails you & you’ll never reach the very top You got a style like Aero. Best believe there’s something Ass in every drop - lol. &&&Ya wife been on the squa for the whooole season Shaming ya badly; Avery Bradley. U gave that bitch a Ring for no reason - Well written, but an iffy closer. JaysonFresh: Yo. Its Mr. Fresh.. - Oh boy... vs the guy who took Butlers style n gave it serious flaws Ima clear this imposta out quicka than his bank account when Prince of Nigeria calls - Dumb, but made me chuckle. nscrawny ass. run when my gun triggers pushin u ova's like drug mules in airport stalls .. force u out with one finger - Kind of cool. referee stoppage first round nigga no opening dong get popped before the count like gender reveal party gone wrong. - haha... :) Who da’ real pussy? when my tool’s drawn.. I’ll put a chink in ya armor to expose the bitch inside like gottam Mulan. - Chink in ya armor is played af to me... but this was actually done well. shiiit one look atcha no wonder fiancee aint sober too Yalls wedding registry included a paper bag to put over u - Funny. But very... general. plus she call me ova like yoo Jay wanna fuck quick? I give her 'privates the kinda drill session' that make her pussy army crawl thru mud pits. - Again, clever... but this is some stored in your notebook for a rainy day shit. Ur dunzo. one punch, ya mouth n chest wall connect jaw locked up soooo long doggg its plottin prison escape thru crawl vents - Loved this. More of this please. check it I pick up chicks that belong on magazine covers ya u kick game too. Mad when ya bf stood u up at dave & busters. - Just seems very elementary to me. Schoolyard diss. This was a good battle... Both are good writer's and displayed their wit. But I think J Fresh's verse was just too general for my liking. His punchlines could've applied to anyone; And although everybody has these types of lines, I felt Orc mixed and matched his a little better. His verse seem tailored to the opponent/league/current events, etc... J's seemed... thrown at the wall and see what sticks... If that makes sense. Very entertaining though. Vote: Orc __________________ ..Passed the Present and Future..