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Universe · 10-09-2020, 05:08 AM

evaD:

Do I wanna see an aero comeback? Nope that’s enough now
If I’m taken aback after reading his verse it’s just so I can choke him the fuck out

- I love this concept - not new, but this was done right.

Seen ur pic in the discord and good lawwwwd.. nearly knocked me off my feet
5’6” and a face so clapped out it could’ve been a gospel beat

- haha.. I'll take your word for it.

Most wont admit to hearding plump chicks but this fucking herb just loves it
I haven’t seen such a display of wanton abandon since he dumped his girl in public

- lol. Very nice.

Tiny guy with big ideas, don’t know why this cunt is rated
Bet He makes as little impact in this XV as all the other ones he’s dated

- solid.

I’ve lived with my girl for almost as long as this guy has been alone
You could say that we play house but he’d think we’re describing his dream home

- I really like your set up lines... Relevant, and with multi's. Good stuff.

This comeback to text will be one he regrets; he was hoping I would miss this
Bout to snuff out a vet, He can suffer or jet but his only votes will be from bitches

- nice scheme here to end it.

Dave is dope.

Aero:

It's a dark autumn night in Wisconsin. Aero is in bed in his palatial estate when he hears a car pull into his driveway. Vrroooooom... Leaves rustling. Aero, heart beating through his chest slightly opens the blinds to see who could be in his driveway this late at night. The driver of the car turns off his headlights.

The driver pulls out what appears to be a phone. Maybe a gun. It's hard to tell. Aero takes a closer look and the object has a neon green background. Could this be? A netceer at his house?

A Nokia flip phone. It's Dave. Aero knew he meant business.

Dave dialed a number...

- lol loved this.

I'm thinking what a killjoy, dont do it I'm begging you
One call & the bitch came out of me.. frantic "Dave knows I'm here pegging you.."

- okay, so let's continue the story lol

I said tell him you cant talk you're on 1%, she said that's a lie to my spouse
I put my little guy in her mouth, then said you ARE on 1% look at the size of my house

- I mean, cool. But this is the statement-ish stuff that I got in trouble for.

Dave... your time here was hopeless from start
Only thing more tragic in 2020 is COVID and the verse Uni just posted for Barc

- lol... I deserved this.

I can leave a bitch easily, I'm never lacking for sex
Last time you cut ties with a bitch you helped her get back at her ex

- took me a moment with this one lol, but very nice.

I work with kids, try to show em in life there's better things
You work with kids, the manager at Wendy's is seventeen

- this read weird. Only because "things" and "teen" never really blend well on first look. It rhymes, I know... just comes off awk in text form.

Weirdo went to get gas, it read "lift handle & select grade" what a loser
He took the grip of his pistol went to a school and raped a bunch of middle schoolers

- hahahhaa ... I actually really liked this closer.

Aero... you're better than I thought you were man.

This was a good battle... evaD brought the heat but Aero brought the creativity in how he presented his verse. I kind of want to tell Aero to come join a topical league because I think his storytelling abilities would shine in that environment. But in terms of straight battling, I got to go with evaD here.

Aero, I know you signed out, but I hope we meet up somewhere down the line - either here or in GWL season 2. Sign up!

Vote - evaD

10-09-2020, 05:08 AM	#11
Universe Everything's Connected Join Date: Nov 2017 Location: Niagara Falls, Canada Posts: 1,001 Battle Record: 19-8 Champed - Guerrilla Writing League(2x) - GWL Picture challenge(2x) - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 10178706	evaD: Do I wanna see an aero comeback? Nope that’s enough now If I’m taken aback after reading his verse it’s just so I can choke him the fuck out - I love this concept - not new, but this was done right. Seen ur pic in the discord and good lawwwwd.. nearly knocked me off my feet 5’6” and a face so clapped out it could’ve been a gospel beat - haha.. I'll take your word for it. Most wont admit to hearding plump chicks but this fucking herb just loves it I haven’t seen such a display of wanton abandon since he dumped his girl in public - lol. Very nice. Tiny guy with big ideas, don’t know why this cunt is rated Bet He makes as little impact in this XV as all the other ones he’s dated - solid. I’ve lived with my girl for almost as long as this guy has been alone You could say that we play house but he’d think we’re describing his dream home - I really like your set up lines... Relevant, and with multi's. Good stuff. This comeback to text will be one he regrets; he was hoping I would miss this Bout to snuff out a vet, He can suffer or jet but his only votes will be from bitches - nice scheme here to end it. Dave is dope. Aero: It's a dark autumn night in Wisconsin. Aero is in bed in his palatial estate when he hears a car pull into his driveway. Vrroooooom... Leaves rustling. Aero, heart beating through his chest slightly opens the blinds to see who could be in his driveway this late at night. The driver of the car turns off his headlights. The driver pulls out what appears to be a phone. Maybe a gun. It's hard to tell. Aero takes a closer look and the object has a neon green background. Could this be? A netceer at his house? A Nokia flip phone. It's Dave. Aero knew he meant business. Dave dialed a number... - lol loved this. I'm thinking what a killjoy, dont do it I'm begging you One call & the bitch came out of me.. frantic "Dave knows I'm here pegging you.." - okay, so let's continue the story lol I said tell him you cant talk you're on 1%, she said that's a lie to my spouse I put my little guy in her mouth, then said you ARE on 1% look at the size of my house - I mean, cool. But this is the statement-ish stuff that I got in trouble for. Dave... your time here was hopeless from start Only thing more tragic in 2020 is COVID and the verse Uni just posted for Barc - lol... I deserved this. I can leave a bitch easily, I'm never lacking for sex Last time you cut ties with a bitch you helped her get back at her ex - took me a moment with this one lol, but very nice. I work with kids, try to show em in life there's better things You work with kids, the manager at Wendy's is seventeen - this read weird. Only because "things" and "teen" never really blend well on first look. It rhymes, I know... just comes off awk in text form. Weirdo went to get gas, it read "lift handle & select grade" what a loser He took the grip of his pistol went to a school and raped a bunch of middle schoolers - hahahhaa ... I actually really liked this closer. Aero... you're better than I thought you were man. This was a good battle... evaD brought the heat but Aero brought the creativity in how he presented his verse. I kind of want to tell Aero to come join a topical league because I think his storytelling abilities would shine in that environment. But in terms of straight battling, I got to go with evaD here. Aero, I know you signed out, but I hope we meet up somewhere down the line - either here or in GWL season 2. Sign up! Vote - evaD __________________ ..Passed the Present and Future..