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Old 09-25-2020, 02:33 PM   #10
Johnny 6 feet
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Great as usual Adverse. Stunning use of imagery throughout which immediately put me in the narrator's mind. The way you so perfectly described both the juxtaposition of being lonely in a big city (I live in Liverpool, trust me, I can relate) and then connected it to the twist at the end was a brilliant transition. Great take on the topic, connected exactly to the image. Rhyme scheme stayed compound without ever feeling awkward. Great work.

I post quotes but it'd be most of the damn verse. :)
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