I’m driving with her purse, a gun in my hand feeling like Madea
Lol, that made me laugh.
Not sure how I feel about a rape story. Or, how it ties into the picture. The flow was there, wordplay, well worded, except, for the worsened bar..
Idk, it was written well. I just don't like the idea behind it or how I don't see how it matched the topic.
Johnny;
Evenings swimming in rage, drinking my bank account dry
Sanctuary in my silver screens, their glow a brilliant sheen
Broadcast subliminal whispers to the ears of willing teens
I liked those lines.
Anger / answer not rhyming threw the flow off. It was smoooth until then.
Overall, really solid verse. This tied into the topic very well. Enjoyable read.
vJohnny
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