Adverse- Great as usual. You took the topic in a sinister direction and told a smooth story that kept up a pace with wicked imagery and an even flow which never fell off. I felt the narrator's heartbreak especially with the vivid wordplay you put in here:
I’ve been bobbin in the waves poured from this bottle, a fifth
Since I seen you hacked to bits, I’ve been picking up the pieces of me
Bullets of cold sweat dive from my forehead, disguised in the rainfall
The ending was predictable, but that's not always a bad thing. The execution (pun intended) was great. A perfect note to end on. You did a lot in the line limit. Well done.
Inno- A similar take but a different direction. It almost seems as if what you and Adverse wrote could be two sides of the same fucked up coin. You always bring intense imagery to your writing and this effort was no different. A dive into a psychopath's stream of conscious is always a rough ride but you kept it moving at a steady pace to the conclusion which finished at the snapshot of the image really well. A few awkward rhymes here and there but this was a cut above the average topical as usual.
Vote- Adverse
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