[sral]

Shame it got no showed for real.

The Heroin me / hero in me play on words was a nice touch to each verse. The opening stanza was fun to read, but the second was even better and drove the verse due to the conflict the character is presented with - saving the unborn. The more punchline-esque style worked for you here, it wasn’t what we’re perhaps used to seeing from a topical standpoint in terms of character development or emotional investment but given the shorter line limit this round the focus sort of had to be more a snapshot in time, placing the reader firmly in your story and creating something short and succinct. It was difficult to really develop a “story” in so few lines so I think you did very well under the circumstances here, keeping it to two (three?) characters and focusing on them and their plight rather than something bigger picture. The “reveal” wasn’t the typical twist ending where you pulled the rug from under the reader, which may have been a good tactic given the brevity of this round, but you did enough to ground your characters in their setting and told it very well indeed, easily one of the better verses this round.

Good stuff, Zuch.

Thank you for showing.