Rawn M.D.

This was pretty nice.... Imma elaborate in a second once
my tablet boots I'm just on my phone atm but I got u

alrght

conceptually this was cool, and was an interesting take on one vs many
i did like how u kept eluding to the ocean...even if at the end it transformed to a sea lol..j/p, but yeah and then concluding with drowned...bleed the idea throughout the pc..

rhyme scheme wise, it was effective...sometimes it felt that u were on the verge of rhyming to much..or forcing the rhyme...but nothing really felt forced...u just like walked up to the line with it imo...so that worked...and also u werren't rhyming to rhyme the wordchoice u used had a meaning and went with the thought. ur transitions were executed well also...however a polish coulda been done in a few places...'his fearless charged' for example doesnt make much sense...i mean i can infer it but ya know..maybe just me, ill slide that to creative license though...so in the few occurarances it happens u get a pass there.

Flow was i mean it def had a flow, a lil basic, but i caught it...some multi's would really bring that area to life...u have a few scattered..but none consistant

content wise, like i said u werent just rhyming to rhyme...and u had an extended meta that u eluded to throughout...n it had a logical intro, body, end n stayed on topic...my only problem was sometimes it got repetitive with the 'he's' 'his' and 'hits'u use those three words way to much it seems...use some adjectives give some descriptio...this pc aint really an 'imagery' type of pc buut u got hella pro-nouns n verbs...

i maybe being overly critical, bbut im just tryna help u..cuz u got me BIG...

All-in-all tho,i did enjoy it, just can use some work in a few places thas all...my fav part was the 'banshe/banish the seaa' line as well (quoted above)

and for what its worth u expressed ursef in a nice concise manner, bc ive seen people go on n on about these kinda topics n not convey what u did.

but keep droppin...

il peep