Ok, as we are well aware of how important these 3 way finals are, I've saved my final high from marijuana for this voting occasion, as I am now out of it.
So let's get to it shall we:
DEAD MAN
bodega ballroom barbecue our common collective
work fingers to the bone to sew an officer's vest
You had a long string of rhymes and then this vowel-matcher, which you have a knack for doing 2-3 times per verse.
telling us to be ourselves
and advertising false designer
finally at a tipping scale
YES. 'Tipping scale' is very bendable here aloud.
the universal card decliner
writing fiction. HG Wells
Very nice.
but where do you fall when that no longer applies?
my daughter is 9. i promised she won't grow in this climate
I like the daughter is 9 rhyme. And then another vowel-matcher of 'grow in this climate' followed by 4-5 good rhymes with that phrase.
THEME?
This is a verse that seems fed up with the world. But in so doing, with a lot of description and nuance.
Technically you're all there, and packed a bunch of rhymes again.
Tone of your signature style. I enjoyed the verse and it is certainly worthy of a Finals showing sir; and has a good chance.
UNIVERSE
A quality German verse from Universe. That whole second stanza was fire.
You may know it as eugenics, sure... We were prized for our Viking roots
Our eyes were blue, so I can prove we raped and pillaged just like them too
Forced to take pills and diet, true... Yet we were given the finest food
Bred for primal use and vetted like canine lupus while lined in groups
The rest shipped to orphanages, beautiful kids turned hybrid mutants
Who removed islands full of Jews by making Bermuda Triangles of humans
Packed a lot of tight rhymes in at towards the end of this quote.
Almost wanted the Grandma to keep telling the story but, as usual you have control of the reader and take them over to present day.
Then your signature twist of the father and son Nazi dynamic.
Good descriptions back in your first stanza.
More dialogue in the third stanza, usually hard to do (for a peasant such as i)
Kept me engaged. Technically sound per usual. You rhyme a lot like Lars but also have some unique qualities in your diction. You seem a born storyteller, and these are often awarded for their difficulty and depth.
Worthy of a finals showing and I believe a better showing than your last couple of weeks if I'm being honest. Thoroughly enjoyed it and it has a good chance.
BOOM/LARS
You went very Lars on this one, for sure. More than dead man went dead man and universe went universe. You know what I mean.
With your detailed knowledge of early homo sapiens.
holding the flame of ingenuity
one of many fire wordplays
frenzical fire flickered
Good alliteration
firing up our outward observants
who now have a burning desire to learn how to preserve it.
met its proverbial match.
we became as persistent as that first flame
We both blazed our significant trails
by engulfing OK, A LOT of fire wordplays!
A lot of fire and fire summary. But again, I learned something from a science based verse.
Technically you are very sound as usual, One of the highlights of this 3 way finals, as all 3 of these competitors really bring it.
This is a good verse that certainly has a chance among the three.
And I feel like I'm at the conclusion of my analysis with still no decision.
2 THOROUGH READS each, prior to voting. And then more reads DURING voting.
dead man has the best aura or tone to his verse, that skeptical yet descriptive painting.
universe told the best story, in his signature style.
lars educated us again, so it's very hard.
All 3 technically sound so it comes to the verse I enjoyed most.
And after considerable consideration that goes to V/ DEAD MAN here.
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