Dead man
I’ll start off by saying I know black is a staple in the OM. But I rarely go in there and when I do I skim through ish. The only time I break down a deadman’s verse is when he’s dropping for a league. Anyway what I’m trying to say is this is a refreshing piece from dead. For me it’s the usual dead man verse. I’m digging the compact lines packed with so much meaning they burst. The diction is spot on as always and with this new look it emphasizes them that much more. I feel like you got going towards the end and took it to another level. The rest of the verse has hints of topic scattered through out but towards the end you got a bit more literal without sacrificing the flow of the piece. I thought your take on the topic was original and clever, all do to your amazing wording and phrasing. This didn’t disappoint at all great work black.
6
Man this was woven almost perfectly from start to finish. I enjoyed the narrative you created. You have a knack for crafting well told stories which is always dope. The development of your story progressed really well from the start to a little over the middle part. You did an excellent job painting a scene around your character effectively layering your piece with depth and meaning. The story is a rising star who becomes to big for his bridges. Cool take. The only thing for me is I wish you would spent a little more time developing his down fall, felt like his downfall was a little abrupt for my liking. Also a side note you could played off the fact that it’s a bit presumptuous you think your self a god and think you have some kind of power over that perception. That’s just my personal knit picking lol. Dope read man this is one of your better pieces this season.
OveralL
2 different styles and takes to the topic. I enjoyed blacks diction and phrasing through out his verse. A little abstract but still balanced along that line. While 6 went for a straight forward story with great character development and intern a nice a scenario painted through great story telling. This was a dope battle and a dope showing from both. In the end I gotta choose one and I’m going with dead man based off style preference. His verse resonated a bit more with me. If had that blend of poetry and just the right amount of story. Thanks for the read fellas
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