Inno- A reflection of the nature of failed relationships was an interesting take on the topic. Your narrator reminiscing on all the little details of his lost love while looking to the future at the end fit the title perfectly. Some really nice lines in here:
'Netflix and condom rips, spending time like we owned it'
'These few days have been bliss, losing my self in her whims
Time is funny, Her body my canvas, I’ve painted every inch
As the brush strokes dry revealing our portrait
The hues from my spectrum never seem to penetrate her surface'
It was real, it was good, but it wasn't real good was the message I took from this. You didn't wallow in misery but rather looked upon the experience as something to grow from which I thought was the braver take. I like the art themed lines as well which helped bring this to life. Good work man.
Clutbuck- A fan of Benjamin Button i presume? Lol. A really interesting take on the title. A man living his life in reverse while speaking as if it's going forward. The flow of this never stalled for a moment. At the start I thought it might be a zombie horror themed take but was actually pretty funny and whimsical. You transitioned nicely into a philosophical pondering at the meaning of it all which I appreciated, and fit well with the overall theme of the piece. Good choice or vocab and imagery too. Creative stuff man, great read.
Vote- Clut/Boom
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