[Objective]

Quite a sad story about deep depression, loneliness and perhaps mania(?) of sorts. The deterioration of self is a brutal one.

This one kinda reminds me a bit about a girl I know in the city I live in. We're not talking just scars, we're talking flesh hanging to the side 40 stitches in the hospital-scars, too. Not from just one episode either, unfortunately. Loneliness runs deep there too at times. The bi-polar tendencies, suicidal crave and mental sanity blended with bouts of insanity is definitely Hell's gift to humans.

Only thing I didn't really like was the "leaves em dead with a written"-line, seemed more swag'n'flow-ish to me and kinda broke the style you had going. Not saying you should stop doing it, just saying it didn't do anything for me. I understand it's to wrap up the piece but personally that approach didn't speak to me as much. The last couplet was cool conceptually and I dug it, think it could have been executed/worded better tho but that's nitpicking.

Overall a cool piece and story albeit depressive, one of your better ones imo. Stay up and keep writing!