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this wud fill our hearts but shes kissing against force
great to see some love cuz these buttons are on verge of divorce
I like the juxtaposition of love and separation, but the wording is weak here
she's like.. suprise bitch! bro do u know her at all
u know hes Far from home when chicks confuse him with jake gyllenhaal
this isn't much of a diss... Its a borderline compliment lol
i see u dressed up for the call, dude doesnt flicker
ironic how a suit, a wood and a desperate widow ends in the same picture
this one is a little all over the place in the opener and the pinch is very weirdly phrased. I don't think this angle was strong to begin with and there wasn't much to be done with it.
ur pale skin color dazzles me, I prefer ur wife's
i aint sayin u shud marry Melanin, but u could use some color in ur life
unless I'm missing something with 'Melanin' it's a pretty goofy, but light way to say he's pale. Fair angle, kind of weak
the bitch got like 4 lips you will regret it at sunset
as far as french kisses goes he'll be surprised when it ends with a baguette
setup is crazy all over the place. The idea is funny, but going from French kiss to baguette could've been handled better.

So, I'm noticing a lot of second vs third person in the same bar. Your closer, for example, you're talking to him in the setup but about him in the punch. That can be slightly jarring imo, so your wording needs to be good to compensate for it. Try to keep the perspective you're writing in consistent for each bar and it may help. Your setups are doing a little too much sometimes. Keep them simple, because if theu get weird, it takes away from impact before your bar has a chance to really land. My favorite bars of yours were the opener and closer - good uses of details unique to the pic (buttons and French kiss).



IM STRAPPED IN! He’s is too but the ropes are killin em
Y’all thought he was funny? Soon he’ll be a dead joke like Robin Williams
there's potential with being strapped or on the ropes, but the punch itself is barely related... Also I have to think some comedians have died since Robin Williams
Fuck this dude, the fugly pics need to stop
we see this turkey legs next to muffin top....slow that down I said this turd keys next to muff ina top!
I hate you
Fat like a cash cow; amen in the background - attitude like fuck it
Prolly eat lunch w ur cousins; U’ll get “aired” like Netflix shows and you love it
I regret this league
They said I was a genius at this craft, they said you were just trash now
Cause you ain’t amountain to nothing unless it’s literally in ur background
this is probably your best punch. Interpret as you wish
You look like Hush if he were fat dumb and happy; where is your pappy?
Finny in pics; Sharp w the sticks - music teacher yet ur hair isn’t nappy
I don't get it at all

I think Mac was somehow more consistent but this is a weak showing from both

V/mac