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Old 07-25-2020, 03:05 PM   #10
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my man candy. i enjoyed this. Seems to be about a drug addict who traverse the city's alleys looking for drug or i think it could've been a metaphor for your adventure in drugs? like with most of your work, its left much to interpretations. Some lines were fantastic to me. "blankets made of too late", i don't always know what they mean but the turn of phrase is often time awesome lul. Overall, its not a bad verse, just a little too cryptic.

boom, nasty! "fixated on my response." oh man do i know what that means! that part really illustrated perfectly the whole "we're superhero" to our kids and their innate need for approval lulz. really cool man. short and sweet while maintaining strong mechanics.

vote, lars for the overal stronger verse.
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