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Old 07-25-2020, 01:02 PM   #9
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Alright guys this was a very close battle and I can understand why many voters have shyed away from it.

Universe - As others have said I'm sort of immune to your shock imagery at this point as we've seen you write some pretty fucked up stories this szn lol but this wasn't your most gag inducing one. I thought the way you tied everything together at the end was great, I mean the last couple bars were really well put and summed the whole piece up wonderfully, but other than that there wasn't anything super heavy here I think the subject could have been executed a little better like had a higher stakes to it? That's just my opinion, it was okay for what it was but far from your best work

Razah - I really wish you had been a season regular because I enjoyed this, the poetic language was nice your rhyme schemes were dope they were weaved through the verse effortlessly. But as far as a story goes though I couldn't really follow anything, it bounced around and wasn't solid on that front but as far as the way you said everything it sounded good.

Voting Universe here, because while his execution wasn't perfect he was technically proficient and had a coherent story through and through. Just my opinion
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