[big baby]

I'm trying to figure out whether or not I'm being to harsh in my criticisms because of a similarity in voters fatigue, or the fact that this might've not been the most polished of your works.

The fact of the matter is that this is very good, the imagery is always there, and the ability to weave words to sound intense, to convey that certain meaning you wish to invoke, is definitely present. The problem here is that, I don't know if those words were actually that thought provoking, that intense, or the imagery conveyed was either lost in translation from when it traveled from the page to my brain.

Either way - this was fun to read, and I enjoyed it.

I'm going to bold the lines I felt matched the aura of the initial vibe I was getting, and I'm going to leave the ones that I felt didnt' - unbolded from this particular passage.

edit: I'm going to italicize the ones that I felt were cool, but I'm not sure where exactly to go with them - they fit the bill, but perhaps its imposter syndrome??

nobody in our nebula is half as consistent
lying dormant time capsule rooted in ice
giving lectures, taking stranger's stupid advice
moonrise kingdom love machine in need of a fix
needle pierce the vinyl spilling heroin drip
parallel prisoners, filing cabinet homes
a living experiment of where unhappiness goes
you can catch me Lackin often. leather jacket, plastic garden
laughing over carcasses I soak it in like data cartridge
half retarded ragamuffin jamming clams in santa barbara
calling out for something new. listening to static softly
ripple across. waveform digital pond
evolving to destroy us cause we're living too long


Maybe I overthought the meaning of it entirely. Purely written, but to me, at times it seemed misguided. Dope, though.