Master Rock, should've made it a little longer. I'm actually against long ass verses (16+ bars), I think that's sucker shit. I felt like this was too short too really draw out any emotion or expand on the topic. It had a good vibe going but, then it just stops.
John, this was a pretty good verse. Wording was pretty good, flow was pretty smooth, I liked it. It's weird because I read the topic, started reading your verse, kind of figured you were going in that direction, but then I was like Nahh it's something else, but then it went in that direction. Lol.
Landmines lie in the dirt disguised as throwaway comments
Assassin blade tongue masked by smiles as bright as a comet
She first caught me in a pitfall; the depth of her eyes
Cyanide whispers carried on the breath on her lies
Maybe it becomes a personal thing eventually but, that shit hit. I'm sure most people can relate to that. Anyways, overall, the verse was enjoyable. You tied into the topic well, the 'predictable' spin was done really well, and I just liked reading it.
bJohnny
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