Cool battle here
Lol Dave getting better and better. BS line was mad creative, cliff was cool too. Your wording has improved drastically but there’s still work to do. You are one of my fav reads lately because I know I’ll see at least one bar that will make me go damn, usually more. Once you clean up a couple things you could be a top battler easy.
Adverse this was one of your better verses. Shorter bars that get to the punch are my preference and you did that better here than normally. Mad pussy and exotic were cool but nothing super hot. Cool read.
Vote Dave
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Originally Posted by Jabari Black
The sight’s laser. Lift the beam from the hip like a lightsaber/
Or pull up to ya doorstep...I’m on ya porch wavin like polite neighbors/
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