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Old 07-23-2020, 02:05 AM   #6
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Exis - Started out okay but turned into a weird conversation-like, spoken word type piece that I wasn't feeling. At all. Sorry man. (Canadian thing again...) Regardless thank for stepping up so we can read another dead man verse.


dead man - Whew. This was like a breathless smorgasbord of vocab lol.. . There's not much more to say other than Wow. Let's not prolong the kid's suffering and get right to the highlights:

"working to die. living to suffer
be still my heart. Ode to atrioventricular flutter
cell phone / printer / GPS / facsimile buffer
another hole to punch. a new intestine to puncture
reassemble structures i pretended to use
caffeine at 0 six-hundred for the energy boost
"

- Fuck.

"conqueror to castaway to nervous recluse
instincts both primordial and ... currently useless
"

"fuck you. buy a vowel. buy a drink, buy a clue
i'll grow old trying to figure out what binds me to you
bright eyes. new flesh. death in pursuit
wading ankle-deep in poison archipelagos shoeless
"

- <---- this is me speechless.

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