Hey guys good morning, I had fun reading this battle but I may need to reread, it's pretty close.
Art - I thought your verse was decent but it was also kind of bland if you know what I mean? There wasn't really a great deal of adjectives or imagery, it didn't really feel inspired the topic itself was kind of run of the mill but I enjoyed it, I just felt like more could have been done to enhance your ideas and expand on what you had but I was a fan of how smoothly this read. Rhyme schemes were on point
Sym - actually when I read this verse and how it ended it promoted my mind to reread everything I thought it was kind of out of left field but upon further inspection I actually liked it and found it cool. I loved the way you described things, from the way our hit and run victim looked to the deaf Baker and Tom really loved the "Tom gawked his suicide note long forgotten" phrase it was dope, my only complaint was we could have used some more character exposition Tom and Frank were interesting characters and I'm sure they had their own issues would have been cool to further expand on their own shit and give our alien visitors more research as well.
You know I think Sym stole the show this week I'm a fan of Artifice's writing but this was a very dry verse this week and I didn't find it very engaging, Sym had some weak points but I think he overall told a more compelling narrative. Good work to both
V/Sym
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