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I'm assuming most people didn't see orcs pic. I remember it pretty well, but I don't recall every little detail. Take my feed with a grain of salt

Orc’s a storied battler, with a great career that deserves plenty honors
His bars are retarded...so it's only fitting he looks like the real life Jimmy Valmer
this is a solid angle. I like how it was specific to the pic and the type of crutches orc had. Wouldn't count on everyone knowing Jimmy Valmer though. 'Jimmy from South Park' is a safer bet. The setup is a little confusing though. I get that you're using retarded as a compliment, but by doing that you're not making it as much of a punch. If it were me I would've gone for something like 'I know you think your bars are retarded but did you have to dress up as Jimmy' to keep it mean throughout. Of course, you're a different battler, so I'm glad you did it your way too.
Slumped over with that miserable hair piece i need some visual clarity
Because i can't tell if you just hobbled out of rehab or physical therapy
he's coming out of rehab because of his hair? Or does that just exist for the rhyme scheme?
What fitness plan you on my guy? Please sign me up
Because I gotta admit you look totally shredded - well, at least your knee does
I really fuck with this one. I would've made it the opener. It's similar to how your opener started with a fake friendly tone but a more concise and effective bar.
A modern medical marvel, really rattling your doctor’s brain
ACL is usually a sports injury, but you hurt yours cheerin for a soccer game
this one's just kind of meh. The angle itself is bad, but the joke itself is standalone funny
Fucked your mom senseless last night, I told that fat bitch to take it
Already broke her back but he's still lookin down tryna avoid cracks in the pavement
almost distractingly simple tbh. I would've drawn attention to the looking down thing in the setup because it sounds like the bar is mostly a diss towards his mom (until the punchline).
I’m glad you’ve recovered though fam, I have a feeling that hurt
You’ll be posting a similar picture on Insta tomorrow hashtag #WhatHappensWhenYouBattleAdverse
so you've changed your tone for the setup in half of your bars. If you piece a verse together over the week, it's easy to miss. Reading it straight through, though, it's pretty obvious. The punch itself is okay, but I think you could've gotten it across with less clunky wording. "how'd you get that pic from the future???" isn't revolutionary, so I'm glad you tried out the hashtag thing.


Like I said, you're a different person, different style, best that you do it your way. But the changes in tone made it pretty distracting and took away chances for you to get some meaner wording in. The harshest insult you had was directed at Orcs mom. Loved the shredded line.