This is a tough match to call because both did their respective tale/style with such skill. I'm a fan of both pieces, and sym has come into the fray as a late season entry showing lots of promise from seemingly nowhere. Reminds me of Scar earlier this year.
Sym - I liked your tale, as well as the poetic take you went for here, it's funny because you used Inno's usual style against him and he came out of left field here with something new. I liked your word choice and your imagery, really liked this vision of a ship being swallowed up by this creature, but as far as narrative-wise you kind of ran circles around this one event while I would have liked to see you advance the story a ways. Also I think repetition can be a great device but feel like it was a tiny bit overused here, which kind of brings me back to the point of running in circles storywise, but that's just my two cents was still an enjoyable read
Inno - Man this was dope, not only because you had hit us with a change up in style but I also think topic wise you were a lot more focused than your usual verses have been which are usually veiled in a kind of mystique with vague wording and distant imagery. Really liked how relatable you were here and the way you conjured up this simple scene but put so many layers into it. I really liked that. Only complaint was the end could have been more concrete but I let that slide.
I am voting for Inno here, I just found his narrative to be better developed and enjoyed his verse throughout. Good battle folks.
PS: Icarus being the ship's name brought me to back to Johnny 6's debut GWL verse with his circus performer Icarus. Cool little reminder there
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