sym, this is pretty cool my man. never seen anyone implement a rondeau in a topical before lulz. to echo what the others have said, this had a very awesome classical feel about it. almost epic style. the story was i believe about the maiden of the icarus that was attacked by a sea creature and this was all witness by a crow. it had the nautical stuff that ties the verse in with the topic. i really like this man. good stuff.
inno, this was a lot more of a traditional verse than your opponent. very heartfelt, i believe its about your daughter or son? coincidentally i wrote a verse about my daughter a year ago lulz. yours is better though. like i said, the story is heartfelt and certainly tug on my paternal string so thanks for that. The flow although clean, it lacked in stronger techniques. a lot of these were end rhymes. Not that being all technical is the be all end all but it does help give it a more complete package.
vote/ Symetrick. I thought he took more risk and told a more interesting story. Even though inno won in the emotional category i really thought sym edged in just about everything else.
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Last edited by Scar; 06-27-2020 at 10:19 PM.
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