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Universe · 06-25-2020, 04:25 PM

Johnny 6 Feet:

Amazing verse here my man. Flow was on point. You literally remind me of an up and coming and hungry Scar - dangerous and downright scary for anyone to face right now. This was storytelling at its finest and most sophisticated - masterful even, at times. I found myself reading this and thinking, "yeah... this is his best verse yet in the GWL", and that thought held throughout the entire piece and never went away. Even the couple hiccups you had were only hiccups in comparison to what you already wrote, which was basically flawless, in my eyes.

Highlights:

- Not going to quote all of it, but the entire riddle section was captivating.

"Meditated on mountain tops, memorised every crack and fissure
Spent a year in silence to better know the meaning of a whisper"

- Deep.

"Returned home a broken man, I couldn't face up to the bet
To search for wisdom for years and find I'd never taken a step"

"I'd become the answer! How's that for poetic justice?
Stood at every summit just for a philosophical*'Fuck this!'"

- Ending was great too. Wrapped it up nicely around the topic.

Brilliant work.

MMLP:

Well for a "quick keystyle" this was certainly fucking impressive lol. Damn. I really enjoyed this man, in every way. Always good to see my origin story told in such a fine manner lol. Unlike your other pieces though, I did guess what you were going to end with almost right away. Although it wasn't your trademark "twist", it actually was more consistent and therefore overall more enjoyable to read from beginning to end. Twists out of left field are great, but there's something to be said for a slow burn too... which you nailed here. Completely.

Highlights:

"Just a tiny speck floating around, poisoned by the system
with no point to my existence
voiceless, I am stricken"

- Great start

"disjointed, I was injured with a distorted memory
but the ones I grew up with were balls of energy
hearing the calls of destiny
some of us bonded and formed a chemistry"

- Great double entendres.

"Mostly alone in the dark as fractions were splitting
practically swimming
but we stuck together acting on instinct"

"more and more natural tendencies came to me
understanding the erratic process to get from A to B"

Phenomenal battle you two. Super close. I think if MMLP went the full 50 with this and fleshed it out it would've been unbeatable. But as it stands, it's pretty much neck-n'-neck... Guess it's the old cliched "personal preference" vote again.
Why do we feel the need to say that? Of course it's personal preference lol... Anyway...

Really it's like choosing between a Porsche and a Lambo though... can't really go wrong. This will be close in the end... But for me...

Vote - Johnny 6 Feet

Amazing stuff here guys. Could be Battle of the Year nominated next week.

06-25-2020, 04:25 PM	#6
Universe Everything's Connected Join Date: Nov 2017 Location: Niagara Falls, Canada Posts: 1,001 Battle Record: 19-8 Champed - Guerrilla Writing League(2x) - GWL Picture challenge(2x) - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 10178706	Johnny 6 Feet: Amazing verse here my man. Flow was on point. You literally remind me of an up and coming and hungry Scar - dangerous and downright scary for anyone to face right now. This was storytelling at its finest and most sophisticated - masterful even, at times. I found myself reading this and thinking, "yeah... this is his best verse yet in the GWL", and that thought held throughout the entire piece and never went away. Even the couple hiccups you had were only hiccups in comparison to what you already wrote, which was basically flawless, in my eyes. Highlights: - Not going to quote all of it, but the entire riddle section was captivating. "Meditated on mountain tops, memorised every crack and fissure Spent a year in silence to better know the meaning of a whisper" - Deep. "Returned home a broken man, I couldn't face up to the bet To search for wisdom for years and find I'd never taken a step" "I'd become the answer! How's that for poetic justice? Stood at every summit just for a philosophical'Fuck this!'" - Ending was great too. Wrapped it up nicely around the topic. Brilliant work. MMLP: Well for a "quick keystyle" this was certainly fucking impressive lol. Damn. I really enjoyed this man, in every way. Always good to see my origin story told in such a fine manner lol. Unlike your other pieces though, I did guess what you were going to end with almost right away. Although it wasn't your trademark "twist", it actually was more consistent and therefore overall more enjoyable to read from beginning to end. Twists out of left field are great, but there's something to be said for a slow burn too... which you nailed here. Completely. Highlights: "Just a tiny speck floating around, poisoned by the system with no point to my existence voiceless, I am stricken" - Great start "disjointed, I was injured with a distorted memory but the ones I grew up with were balls of energy hearing the calls of destiny some of us bonded and formed a chemistry" - Great double entendres. "Mostly alone in the dark as fractions were splitting practically swimming but we stuck together acting on instinct" "more and more natural tendencies came to me understanding the erratic process to get from A to B" Phenomenal battle you two. Super close. I think if MMLP went the full 50 with this and fleshed it out it would've been unbeatable. But as it stands, it's pretty much neck-n'-neck... Guess it's the old cliched "personal preference" vote again. Why do we feel the need to say that? Of course it's personal preference lol... Anyway... Really it's like choosing between a Porsche and a Lambo though... can't really go wrong. This will be close in the end... But for me... Vote - Johnny 6 Feet* Amazing stuff here guys. Could be Battle of the Year nominated next week. __________________ ..Passed the Present and Future..