Johnny - held together a topic quite well (though I'm struggling to lock down whether they are an "artist" (i.e. painting/etc.) or an actor - maybe both? exhibition artist?). the random transition to a different scheme threw me a bit, but I enjoyed the hangman reference - one of my favourite paper games.
Quote:
I'm searching for the Midas touch; a script minted in gold
The road bears my footfalls so often, they're imprinted in stone
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this line was clean af.
Inno - this imagery threw me all over the place. in water, graves, stairs, beach, oof. felt like way too quick of transitions, which led to feeling like a disorganized piece (even though it wasn't totally). not a fan of rhyming hands with hand.
mvgt - Johnny