Artifice - Your writing and rhyming structure reminds me a lot of a writer by the name of 'sematic' who used to be on a forum called Rapflava back in the 2003-2007 range. He had crisp, short lines and used a lot of wordplay and puns. This was solid, enjoyable. Favorite part: "ups & downs or in my case recesses and notches" - nice.
brokenhal0 - Interesting ending. I liked your ambitious take and flair, just in terms of the presentation and the way it was laid out. "Can you loan me the pieces?" was poignant line and I enjoyed that. It was unconventionally structured. I didn't think the ending had that much impact compared to the middle but that's just me. A cryptic ending - one of those 'think about it' lines.
Going with Artifice as it was the safer and more accurate take but this was a close battle!
thanks for the reads
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