Neighbor:
ROBBED Des - every single punch you attempted was played.
16 lines of "old" angles & "tired" concepts; even had 1 or 2 where you referenced his age.
"Upset Champion," huh? I'ma take you a peg down in this League.
Only time you had a leg up on your opponent.. was on ya back while the ref counted to 3.
Have you hogtied in the tub.. water runnin while this Ruger 9 firing.
I'm all Overflow w/ the toaster - tryna turn his bathroom to a suicide crime scene.
Even though I've seen the leg up concept done similar still quoted for the execution on it. Both of these were smooth & top lines of the battle.. Flowmaster was a jab, lessened due to the word choice/how you structured it.
Not a bad verse
Other guy, Malignant Tumor was a creative idea but execution was poor. Also, had a couple played ideas like chardonnay ( tho maudlin drunk saved it imo) & neighborhood. asteroids was too, actually. U failed to tie it in well. Not feeling this verse a whole lot.
Vote Neigh
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