First verse, you found the right balance between simplistic and too heavy. I aim to do the same when Im writing so the format
here works for me. Otherwize pretty effortless free flowing without going
overboard with anything. The thematics and vocab you play with here indicate that you are a man of culture, like myself. Overall nice and easy read, would read again if you dropped something similar.
That's Biblical like writtens in Sanskrit
It's like your assholes stitched since you can't do shit
Second, I dug the opener line.
Overall the verse had the right amount of sinister to it, comes off technically soundand fitted the theme. A bit short compared to other perhaps but I guess you said your piece with less bars.
Regret their birth too, I play Ouija boards for laughs
Call your grandma's ghost a bitch, leave her in that portal, trapped
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