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Old 05-21-2020, 06:25 PM   #3
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A snapshot topical. You painted the scene clearly and brought it to a conclusion a punchy manner. Vocab was straightforward but it did the job. Imagery was clear. Rhyme scheme was simple but functional. Pretty good man. GWL could use more people with a topical sense btw.
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