[Bodey]

6feet- super cool quick little story here. i loved that in a lot of lines, you were SHOWING the reader what was happening, rather than plainly saying it. wrapping it up like that at the end with Chris Hansen was a fun detail to the whole thing. really liked that. as someone mentioned before, i would've liked to see more of a background to the main character and how he developed into this twisted personality, but the material still served its purpose.

ender- your story kept me intrigued man, it was really welldone. the end was kind of a letdown honestly, i wanted more but i think it's because there was more of a buildup than there was a conclusion, i guess? it gradually became obvious that the father was the twisted one. and i liked how you left things open for interpretation, like when you said he was going in his son's bedroom and attempting to love him, i wondered if that was a close reference to molestation on top of the beatings. it was also effective referring to the boy as an "it" throughout. but the ending was kind of confusing for me, the friend turning into this evil monster didn't quite fit for me.

as far as the writing aspect goes, i think 6feet edged it in the descriptive aspect. i also think he illustrated the picture a little more than ender did. the only reference i really saw to the pic in ender's piece was referencing watching tv outside and whether or not that was a dream. i liked ender's piece more as a story, but i think 6feet portrayed a more finished product.

v/6feet