Clutbuck- Got to admit I cracked a smile on the first line of the piece. So the worm was the evil mastermind all along? Lol. It was an original and comedic take which always works well when blended with the horror genre. Your compounds were good, not overdone, and use of imagery gave me a sense of the scenes you were portraying and the personality of it's antagonist. Strong narrative structure. You gave character development to an invertebrate! Vocab was strong too. Entertaining from start to finish.
Deadman- A more straightforward take on the picture, but you elevated that take to a poetic vibe with a great command of language in this piece. Philosophical musings about things that are brain dead is a contradiction I can appreciate. Like Clut, good rhyme scheme and use of imagery. Relating the zombies to people was a well travelled analogy (popularised by Romero himself), and a nice salute to tradition. Well crafted stuff man. Easy on the eyes. Good job.
Tough call IMO, I think Dead had the edge on vocab but Clut had it on tech. Imagery between the two was really strong and sharply contrasting. Aaaahhhh...
Ok.
Vote- Clutbuck, I liked his originality and narrative structure a little more, but I wouldn't be surprised if the voting back and forths a lot on this one. Great battle guys.
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