Im not gonna do a massive breakdown on this one since most of my comments would probably just be a repetition of what was said already and I think this is a comfortable W for slecht that doesn't need a tremendous amount of detail
From Mac, "you look like a skunk fucked a mad cow and gave birth to your mother" made me lol a bit, but this one, and many of your other bars were overtly simple and a few of the ones you had that did incorporate a punch e.g. dropping heat and 69 are pretty played out, so my primary suggestion is making sure every bar in your verse is more like those, but try to be more outside of the box with your thinking. A lot of the first ideas that come to your mind will often be things everyone has done at some point
from slecht, he had good concepts in just about every bar, just needs to improve on overall execution. the gronk & brady bar was probably lotb for me though someone else did do a similar bar in a diff battle this week. Make up your mind might be the second best
v/ Slecht
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