J6F, cool interpretation of the pic. a bit on the nose, but well executed. icarus as an extension of the tightrope walker who strode too close to his own success. it's a sad story. we always say, well at least i do, that if i ever end up in a situation like your protagonist, just pull the fucking plug. harder to say than to do. your recurring "hook" worked well as a device to keep the reader engaged and grounded. its not often utilized but i liked it here. well written and focused submission.
artifice, i find it interesting you both included alcoholism as central themes of your verses. functioning alcoholism is indeed like walking a tightrope. very dangerous game to play, but we play it nonetheless. the "so many shots, chased with lime" was probably my standout line. wrapped it all up with a direct reference to the image. i liked it.
sorry for the short vote, it's been hard to find a moment to focus.
overall, i think J6F had a more creative submission here. voting for johnny.
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