[Bodey]

ender- man as sick as it is, i love dark pieces like this, especially with the ending line, i honestly found it comical. morbid humor i guess. but i didnt expect that. i disagree with previous commentary about how this isn't what the picture was trying to tell us-- or whatever i breezed through above. that's why topicals are awesome because you can make it whatever you want as long as you make it connect. i'm not gonna echo what's already mentioned, that this was a very basic technical verse. maybe we are spoiled because we've seen better from you as far as writing goes. all in all, i liked the dramedy approach.

inno- very nice illustrative writing going on here.
the love of naypalm in the morning
is infectious.
dreaming of sleep with eyes wide shut.
war is contagious.
trying to forget who they are in the dusk.

liked this a lot. like, i felt it.

while ender had a more rhythmic breezy read to his piece, i think inno edged this with his imagery, and also that i found the picture matched his submission more than ender's did. also, i found it had more of an emotional appeal to it. with that, i gotta go with him

v/inno