I had a long vote and that shit got timed out Godam it
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This was a solid verse bro. The way you painted the emotions with your words was something else. Your imagery was spot while your wording was smooth and delicate lol. The intro outro thing was cool. I hated ruder and abrupt it was awkwardly phrased in the beginning but you flipped it in he ending and I caught a big more appreciation for it tbh lol. Honestly only flaw I see is the ending, could of been a little more impactful but if fits the story well.
Dead man
Lol man this was some top notch story telling tbh. It was yet again a clever take on the topic. Very subtle way to take away from the main focal point of the picture but still bringing it to light in the end. You know I love how you focus on the cheating aspect but in the the twist bring the obvious point across, soem one always gets hurt. It’s a very relatable take tbh. The twist though unexpected felt like it was coming. Great way to look into your self and be honest about what your guilty of. Dope
Overall
I had a whole break down and quotes and all and my phone died lol. Any way this was such a dope battle thank you both. Ssverse had the raw emotion and imagery while black had the story telling and perspective. Man this is tough, great week this week lol. I wish I could vote tie but I can’t. I’m gonna give this one to dead man by an ass hair. Such a dope a battle foreal thanks guys for the read!
Dead man
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