Clut
MARIO I’m old age? Lol you clever fuck this was a dope take. Another example of someone writing something so obvious yet unexpected. Like reading your verse first then looking at the picture, it fits perfectly tbh. I like the diction in this as always you write this smooth complex tightly woven story that’s never out of reach for the reader. You manage to tongue twist and bob weave with your metaphors yet always bringing the reader back around. The dementia bit brings it all together with a touch of grace. Really enjoyed this piece my g.
UNI
Like art said, a diss in a topical form is so hard to do as you have to teeter on the line so much. You did an excellent job balancing the piece together nicely. Technically this is on point which is another tough job to keep going. I enjoyed the subtle way you blended the wording of a diss to the more deep wording of a topical. I also the enjoyed the humor sprinkled through out the piece as well. Gotta say almost as clever take as lars going the MARIO route. Not to many diss topicals for a reason but honestly you pulled it off easily and I can appreciate it that.
Overall
Another dope battle to choice from. Both heavy weights showed up to the bout and slugged it out. Lars’ clever take on the topic was dope and UNIs attemp at a diss was equally dope but dam it I think I’m going with lars on this one simple because his take was a little more creative and in the end made for a more enjoyable read in my eyes. I can appreciate the diss format but lars’ take kept my attention longer. Great battle guys really thanks for the read.
Clut
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