Interesting, two very off-beat approaches here...
Ender
You took a straightforward story approach, which is cool, but it didn't connect to the image as much as it could have. Technically you were on point, although the rhyming wasn't the most complex. It did enough to drive the narrative you wanted. I would have liked to see more development of the character, why is he the way he is? I get that it bothered him for a moment, then quickly moved past it, I just felt that it didn't grab me.
Inno
While you had some really incredible imagery in here, and you took the pic and developed a much more sophisticated piece from it, the rhyming I found difficult to find. There were spots where it was fine, but in other spots and multiple reads I still find it difficult. It's certainly got a poetic vibe to it, but I've always held topicals to a certain standard of rhyme scheme and treat poetry as it's own division. For me, this delved a little too far rhythmically, despite it being superior in other regards.
v/ Ender
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