Ender- Dark as the grave, man. You brought the personality of your narrator to the forefront in this one and made him truly hateable. You a James Cameron fan? That's the type of shit he does, lol. The scenes you described were hard to read because of the subject matter, but well realised through your use of imagery. The punchline at the end, his total lack of regret, was a bold choice but consistent with the type of character you presented. Rhyme scheme was solid. You meshed with the picture well. Vocab wise it could've stood be stronger, but it got the job done.
Inno- Liked your take on the topic. Tentative optimism degenerating all the way to the grave. The imagery, liked your previous pieces, was the strongest aspect of the piece. Some lines in particular stood out for me:
"losing brothers by the minute, the family tree runs dry,
while its roots soak in the souls."
"to chase death and not want it, to loathe life and then cherish it.
they pleaded guilty to peace. but the guns kept judging."
The pacing was strong overall, although I felt the flow of it went off the rails in the middle stanza, like you threw the rhyme scheme out the window. The ending was poetic, sad honestly. You had me thinking about what happens to the people cast off by society after walking into Hell for them and it was a powerful note to end on.
Vote- Inno, while Ender was more consistent flow/rhyme wise, I though Inno tipped the balance with his wording and use of imagery.
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