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Old 05-10-2020, 10:37 AM   #4
Johnny 6 feet
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Original as fuck. You took a unique topic and managed to lace it through the life story of your character without ever losing the running theme of mathematics. I like the idea of someone being written off only to turn the situation around and shine. Great metaphors, strong rhyme scheme and great choice of vocab. the length was just right; didn't overstay it's welcome.

Great stuff man. Keep up the good work. Rtf if you can.

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