Adverse- Wow. The emotion in this piece was so well executed. The narrators dream was dripping with imagery and powerful memories that made me connect to the piece on a personal level. Losing someone you love to cancer is a hell I can relate to.
"I think how breathtaking you looked even as the cancer destroyed your vessel
Silk white dress, already looked the part as you ascended into heaven"
Great use of vocab and your rhyme scheme was strong throughout. Felt the lines were a little stretched here and there, but that's a minor nickpick is a very strong piece. Great work.
Deadman- Another great showing from you this week. You did a good job of putting me in the narrator's mind and explaining his relationship to the woman. Flow wise this was smooth as silk, and plot twist at the end was a great finish that was built up to in just the right way. Pacing, choice of vocab, nothing to fault here.
The quality of this battle is a testament to the quality of the league as a whole. Both came strong with original takes of the topics and there was little to choose between them. But choose i must so...
Vote- Adverse, I felt she had a slightly better take on the topic. On a technical level there wasn't much to separate them.
Great stuff guys. :)
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