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Old 05-10-2020, 03:02 AM   #9
Adverse
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- GWL Picture Challenge
- Guerrilla Writing League
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Was a fan of this battle gentlemen think you both brought a different approach to life but neither was bad. Noetic was more straightforward in relating to the picture topic, yet abstract in writing and I think Blue showed a contrast to that. Made for an interesting matchup.

Blue - Loved the nostalgic aspects of your verse, I connected with them and as a reader those flashback images kind of anchored your verse for me. I loved the descriptiveness of it all my favorite bit was

what’s the single most, oldest memory that u can remember?
i remember mine well, on my back under an apple tree
gentle breeze across my cheek looking past the leaves
sky so blue it’s like it was on a mission to move me
my first deep intrinsic feeling & recognition of beauty
i think that’s probably why it’s always stayed with me
why ive always been drawn to fiction & the make believe

That resonated with me a lot and I really enjoyed it.

Noetic:
This was a solid first showing in the league, you came up the gate swinging like the rhyming and vocab in the first few bars were bonkers, I was impressed by the way you were crafting them together but then it just started to slouch a bit and drag it’s feet. I liked the idea just some of the execution needed some work. If you wrote more bars akin to your first 8 you’d have made this match closer imo

V/Blue wrote a compelling narrative throughout and was just sharper imo. Good bout fellas
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