[Bodey]

Vulgar- pretty sad story. i liked how descriptive you got with his appearance, i could actually pic what dude looked like. it's ironic how often we help people that don't deserve it, and yet here we are. he truly is a black sheep in more ways than one. good stuff

Phar- your shit has improved a lot lately, i just wanna say you're starting to master how to paint a scene in writing, and it's like at the budding stages so it's awesome to watch you get better and better every week. reading this felt like sitting at my dinner table with my parents, brothers, and sister. there's like an unspoken rule in my house that we dont bring up politics in front of dad lol for real bro. i feel like it ended quite suddenly, like i was hoping they'd get in a way worse argument than that, like i wanted john to lose his shit.

i'm giving this to Vulgar because his narrative went a little deeper here, and more illustrative in the style he was writing in. but Phar, you're getting the right idea. and i think if you had taken your story up a notch further, you would've had this. this was actually a hard vote for me so thanks for lettin me peep

v/Vulgar