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adverse, yeah this the adverse i know. a very interesting story wrapped in poetic language that's customary of "you". I really enjoy this alot. It tells of a lovestricken guy who has this recurrign dream - or nightmare - where his beloved is calling him to join her. Its a very sad an emotional driven piece that really works with that picture. One of the best thing about this verse were the imagery. You packed it full of very nice appropriate imagery. It was haunting for sure. The rhymes were very good. the accumulated dust not only a nice rhyme but an awesome imagery. There's not much wrong with this verse besides maybe a couple of jarring spots in the flow the department.

dead man, this was a cool take on the topic. I won't dive into the plot as Uni pretty summed it up perfectly. The picture serves as but one component to the story but it spoke with much volume. THe fact that a suicide in front of the character did very little to stir him from his devotion to this unnamed, attached woman spoke to the degree of affection he holds for her. This was a very cool character study. Still intact are the crisp rhyme scheme and economical wording that paint pictures in interesting way. I really enjoyed this verse. thanks.

Both adhere to the effect of outside influence. But I felt dead dug deeper in that regards. The way the methodically break it down by way of narrative was quite a sight to behold. Ad used a slightly more cliche approach but it was chalk full of emotions. They both ended on somber note but I think deadman examines the cause while ad went for the effect. I’ve seen the latter before and it’s almost akin to tropes so I will vote deadman for a more unique and interesting analysis

v/Dead Man