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Scar · 05-08-2020, 12:45 PM

Oh man, well this is definitely another botw contender for sure!

Lars, this was awesome. I really appreciate your style of writing. There’s a simplicity in its complexity - or is it complexity in its simplicity. Its hard to explain but the diction is very accessible. There are figurative language used but its not in an in your face kind of way, its more subtle. The simplicity here was in the framing which was a fan fiction of the mario lore. Here we see mario, now an aging relic not unlike Batman’s Dark Knight Return - not the movie but the comic which was about a restless and retired batman, living the rest of his days in mundanity. The best part was the subtext of it. Its really about Mario's true nature: the adventure, the fights, the battles. We see this as tendencies creep in while he's doing your normal 84 years old routine lulz;’ The verse was really a simple concept that’s complex in its nuance. Awesome.

Universe, you opted to abandon one storyline for another, here lulz. You chose to add on to the ongoing saga of Universe vs Lars storyline instead, this week. There were so many clever moments here. “"I LOVE the heart that you've shown, may I cut it off and make it my own?" lulz that was awesome. This verse showcases your strategic planning. It's always been evident by the ongoing chapters you write every week but this it touched on an almost sun tzu’ish veneer lulz. Now with that said, i am a bit weary of this feud, if i can be honest. It's fun to read, I won't lie but I think i’d rather read something rooted in imagination as opposed to aversion you know? It was fun the read the first 2 or 3 times but now it should be a battle of the art itself. Regardless, this was still a very close ass battle.

This was a good and close ass battle and can see votes bouncing between the two. For me, in this particular day and time, i have to cast my vote to Lars. it was just more entertaining - even stoking the nostalgic fire lulz. Universe came with a scathing personal approach that was done masterfully but again in this moment in time, i wanted a more imaginative story that can take me places. Lars did that this time.

vote/ lars

05-08-2020, 12:45 PM	#5
Scar Senior Member Join Date: May 2019 Posts: 566 Battle Record: 7-5 Champed - Guerrilla Writing League Rep Power: 5689709	Oh man, well this is definitely another botw contender for sure! Lars, this was awesome. I really appreciate your style of writing. There’s a simplicity in its complexity - or is it complexity in its simplicity. Its hard to explain but the diction is very accessible. There are figurative language used but its not in an in your face kind of way, its more subtle. The simplicity here was in the framing which was a fan fiction of the mario lore. Here we see mario, now an aging relic not unlike Batman’s Dark Knight Return - not the movie but the comic which was about a restless and retired batman, living the rest of his days in mundanity. The best part was the subtext of it. Its really about Mario's true nature: the adventure, the fights, the battles. We see this as tendencies creep in while he's doing your normal 84 years old routine lulz;’ The verse was really a simple concept that’s complex in its nuance. Awesome. Universe, you opted to abandon one storyline for another, here lulz. You chose to add on to the ongoing saga of Universe vs Lars storyline instead, this week. There were so many clever moments here. “"I LOVE the heart that you've shown, may I cut it off and make it my own?" lulz that was awesome. This verse showcases your strategic planning. It's always been evident by the ongoing chapters you write every week but this it touched on an almost sun tzu’ish veneer lulz. Now with that said, i am a bit weary of this feud, if i can be honest. It's fun to read, I won't lie but I think i’d rather read something rooted in imagination as opposed to aversion you know? It was fun the read the first 2 or 3 times but now it should be a battle of the art itself. Regardless, this was still a very close ass battle. This was a good and close ass battle and can see votes bouncing between the two. For me, in this particular day and time, i have to cast my vote to Lars. it was just more entertaining - even stoking the nostalgic fire lulz. Universe came with a scathing personal approach that was done masterfully but again in this moment in time, i wanted a more imaginative story that can take me places. Lars did that this time. vote/ lars Last edited by Scar; 05-08-2020 at 12:53 PM.