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j6f, very my nice man. You are definitely a natural story teller, i can just tell. This verse tells of a performance accident that left a guy bed riddance dealing with a sense of uselessness and meaningless existence - as assessed by him - and ultimately welcome the embrace of death. The visual was very clear and you were still able to incorporate literary devices, upping the quality of the verse. Lots of very interesting and unique analogies. The lion tamer one stood out to me because i've never heard any concept like that lulz. I love the ending. It was subtle but the sparse descriptions really work because of the poetry of it. he's slowly blacking out, that in itself alludes to grim reaper/black robe and all. I'll echo uni in saying that it was a pretty literal interpretation but in this case its the quality of writing that made it work. great read, my man.

Artifice, this was really good. Its clearly not a conventional story but more like a character study. The beauty of this is really in the one-liners and turns of phrase employed. Lots of clever stuff while still maintaining the integrity of the narrative, which in short is about a guy struggling with alcoholism. Again, nothing too groundbreaking there but the way he went about it pushed it to the stratosphere.

again, i'll echo my man uni in saying this is your classical clash of style and there will likely be a back and forth in votes. I"ll be the first to fulfill this universal prophesy lulz and vote Artifice. Love that johnny was able to tell a clear and concise story in such short span but artifice gave me more in terms of "writing" if that makes sense at all. I like the linguistic acrobat (no pun) that he employed, plus i felt his story hit a more universal chord. Not to take light of depression leading to suicidal tendency because thats a very real thing also. ah this is a hard one, salma hayek would definitely be proud of both of youz.

v/artifice