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Old 05-06-2020, 09:33 PM   #3
Artifice
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This was dope. Really looking forward to the rest of the GWL with writers like you in it.

Your storytelling ability is great, the transition from the scientist to his creation as the point of view was seamless. Vocabulary helped paint the picture, the metaphor of musical creation was on point and executed nicely.

also really enjoyed the theatrical tie in at the beginning and how you brought it all back at the end with the 'pulling my strings'... really enjoyable read.
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