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Old 05-04-2020, 08:13 PM   #13
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Candy, cool little character sketch. Visceral and moody. Office spacy. Not huge on your word choices and your rhyme centric language. Kinda clunky and lost its glimmer for me at points. Inno, I liked your submission, definitely more of an abstraction and a “think piece”. It was at point a bit aphoristic and dare i say it, almost cliche, but I’m firmly of the belief that cliche only exists as a concept born out of universal truths. I found myself more interested in your ideas and their inner shadow/outer flesh dissections.

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