Scar
Ok so this was worded slick. You had some really nice phrasing through out the beginning while maintaining that sweat flow you had going. So obviously after reading the whole thing I get that he was day dreaming. Didn’t seem that way when I first got into the the verse tbh. Felt like you where describing a hallucination from what I gathered. I was digging the vibe you created with the voice thing. Felt like you used that to reference him coming in and out of sleep? I might be wrong. The middle part is where you shined with your phrasing and diction. I mean some top notch writing with superb imagery and emotion. Then that voice thing comes back again. At this point it’s a bit distracting for me I’ll explain later. The ending was spot on bro don’t know if you did this on purpose but you made reference to your first line which I think is pretty dope cuz who doesn’t dream and never remember any details? Every one lol. Dope stuff my man gotta read UNI to see if you won this.....
UNI
I like how this starts off with a somber tone. You set the scene perfectly like every verse this season tbh. I like how you set the scene and get right to the dark shit lol. It was a smooth transition tbh. I enjoyed the rhyming and phrasing as well. Seems you and scar matched wits this week. Like your opponent you had equally dope imagery that guided the story along nicely. Gotta say tho I wasn’t expecting such a dark turn. It was jarring but it felt like it was placed perfectly in the arch of the verse. In the end you tied in to last weeks verse with ben coming to the picture. I gotta a lot of question about why ben went their maybe I missed it but yeah. I’m assuming that story isn’t done yet so I’ll wait patiently. As far as how you approached the topic. I mean dam if that’s not a creative take I don’t know what is. You built a story around it instead of a story about it if that makes sense. Dope verse bro
Overall
This is a tough one for sure. I can see why people are staying away from this one and sinacog got 8 votes lol. Anyway scar had a dope take honestly both these dudes had a creative take on the topic so tie there. Technically speaking both where up to par with each other. Each shining in one way while the other in another but never really surpassing each other to far. So this for me basically comes down to preference and I gotta say scar wish you would spent a little more time fleshing out the voice idea. Maybe it went over my head but I just felt like after the first time it was unnecessary. UNI your verse is a continuation of a saga so this weeks entry leaves for sit of questions which could count against you but I’m not doing it this week. In the end man I got UNI edging this one. What a dope battle fellas thanks for the read.
UNI
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